Critique my intro...

[jcheath33]

I will be using this img for the website I am building... it will be center aligned with a start button underneath.. Tell me what you think.. what you like and dont like. How could I make it better? Do you see any problems?

http://i264.photobucket.com/albums/ii166/jcheath33/introdarkcopy.jpg


Thanks,
James

 

[jcheath33]

Also i forgot to give a little information on the website. It will be alot like autotrader.com but with added style, and is geared torwards high end makes such as: ferrari, lambroghini, porsche, bmw...etc. Pretty much exotics and luxury cars. You can ask any questions you would like to.

 

[slick182]

Thoughts:

1. There is a legibility issue. It took me a few seconds to figure out what the words read. I would either put a stroke around the letters (perhaps a nice elegant thing white rule) or re-align the images so there isn't such a contrast of color and grey within the letters.

2. From a design perspective, these cars have such incredible style I would use their features as your focal point rather than a cool knockout technique in photoshop after all the users of your site are more interested in the cars thank your design

 

[Samantha]

its hard to read. its too big and I can see too much of the car so im looking at the car and not the words

 

[kristyinchelsea]

It's a little to busy, very hard to read. I love the idea of the cars but maybe make the words stand out better.

 

[parabola]

I second the idea of adding a slight stroke tot he letters